Primrose#Haibun

blossoms of primrose
gather millions of smiles
spreading sweet fragrance

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3 thoughts on “Primrose#Haibun

  1. A haibun a paragraph or tow of prose followed by a haiku. Please click here for a list of all my haibun. Your haiku is beautiful, but, syllable count and grammar a tiny bit off, my rewrite:

    Blossom of primrose 5s, capital B
    Gathers the millions of smile 8s should be 7s. Add an s to smiles, and drop it off gathers would make this sentence grammatically correct.
    Spreads the sweet frangrance 5s, spelling, fragrance

    blossoms of primrose
    gather millions of smiles
    spreading sweet fragrance
    © Rashmi Sortur

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